tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5837660608809488753.post2536875742974423098..comments2024-03-28T20:53:49.167-04:00Comments on The Adventures of Roberta X: Another Day, Part 17Roberta Xhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09956807794520627885noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5837660608809488753.post-63126435821301878392009-11-06T15:58:29.597-05:002009-11-06T15:58:29.597-05:00Oh, noes! The lovely Bobbi is in peril! What will ...Oh, noes! The lovely Bobbi is in peril! What will she do?<br /><br />This is getting good. No, better than good.<br /><br />I would suggest a rewrite on that whole pressure suit paragraph. It's pretty dense with information, and breaks ups the narrative flow you had going.<br /><br />Or maybe it was just me distracted by the idea of our heroine wearing a form fitting pressure suit . . .samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06266828722290789801noreply@blogger.com